when I skimmed over it I thought, "whoa, you use a lot of quotes!" But then I realized they weren't quotes, so you examples from the text more, but other than that your first essay was good. You wrote to the prompt! Some people didn't, good job on that. :)I give the 1st a 7 The second had great ideas and you formed them very well. There were some grammar errors, but those aren't a big deal. I'll give this one an 8.
We both reached the same conclusion when it came to Elliot. I would say I found your first essay better than your second. There was something about the second that just didn't "catch" me like the first one. Perhaps it's because I'm getting a vibe (if I'm wrong please let me know) that you really didn't read Uncle Tom's Cabin and are really reciting from memory what you remember in U.S. History. Again, I could very easily be wrong, but that's the vibe I'm getting.
when I skimmed over it I thought, "whoa, you use a lot of quotes!" But then I realized they weren't quotes, so you examples from the text more, but other than that your first essay was good. You wrote to the prompt! Some people didn't, good job on that. :)I give the 1st a 7
ReplyDeleteThe second had great ideas and you formed them very well. There were some grammar errors, but those aren't a big deal. I'll give this one an 8.
We both reached the same conclusion when it came to Elliot. I would say I found your first essay better than your second. There was something about the second that just didn't "catch" me like the first one. Perhaps it's because I'm getting a vibe (if I'm wrong please let me know) that you really didn't read Uncle Tom's Cabin and are really reciting from memory what you remember in U.S. History. Again, I could very easily be wrong, but that's the vibe I'm getting.
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